The exhausting walk

Everyone wrote such AMAZING recounts of the trip that it was hard to only put 1 or 2 onto the blog so here are some short snippets from different members of our class. We have been focusing on voice, feelings, detail and thinking about the reader.
ENJOY READING.

The Exhausting Walk

When we got there we got out of the parents cars. We then had to follow the parent to the school. I thought it would only take a second but it didn't.
Zayian


"YAAAAH!", I screamed as I swiftly walked across the damp ground  to the school. I really truly was excited about visiting a different school.
Annabelle

I saw branches and flowers and trees. The walk was making my legs tired.
Cole

As I climbed over the rickety old fence the sun beams in my eyes. Finally I am out of the wiry fence BUT NOW ..... I have an amazingly steep hill ahead of me to climb.
Chantelle

I started my daring climb over the fence but half way through disaster struck....
Heath

Wondering how I am going to climb over the fence I spot a little wooden plank to help me out. Slowly I step over the fence. I slump my shoulders as I gaze at how steep the hill ahead was.
Lily

Finally we arrived at the collosal hill. I asked 'When will it end?" I wish I could fly, I hate long walks. Every 5 seconds I would get pricked by a thorn.
Samuel

We kept advancing across the steep hill trying hard to catch up to the others
"Finally we've caught up", Chantelle said happily.
Emily

As we walk up the hill to go on the huge walk I felt amazing. It was a vast walk ahead. I ran and zoomed up and down the steep hills.
Blair

We went on a tiny walk. We went up hills and down hills and up more hills and down more hills. Finally we were there.
Alyssa

I was soooo thirsty. My mouth was dry and my water bottle was nearly empty. I wanted to save it but I couldn't help it........... G  U  L  P 
"AHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!", wait I was supposed to save it.
George


"Maybe this walk will not be as long as I imagined" but the walk went on and on, continues and continues........ "IV'E HAD ENOUGH OF THIS!!!!!!!!" I sit down to take a rest.
Joe